Um,yeah.Okay,I'm going to try to not be a sob.The poem was really chopped up and short.
It sounds a little cheesy and out of the topic.where two walls
meet and greet
Specify why it is turning blue.starts turning blue
Another name with an 'A' isn't a good idea.her nanny, Anna
No need for caps.It makes the poem quite babyish.!!! would do.THAT'S ENOUGH!
Why?I mean,it doesn't fit with the poem.I tought it was about Alexis.Maybe tomorrow night
Her beautiful Corvette
will find itself
embracing a tree.
ignoring fits better.ignore the bourbon
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